neko-pochi's writing corner

Discussion in 'Fan Fix' started by neko-pochi, Mar 25, 2008.

  1. neko-pochi

    neko-pochi Well-Known Member

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    不如分手.

    静静不停流的眼泪
    我无法明你怎么可
    抛弃很幸福的一切
    说过会保护的爱情
    完美安排好的未来

    淡淡一句不如分手
    当天重以为你讲笑
    但你很认真对我说
    感情已经不再在了

    为了什么不再要我
    不想一起白头到老
    淡淡一句还是朋友
    给我太难受的痛苦
    告诉我做错了哪里

    孤孤单单看着月光
    望或者下世会更好


    neko-pochi (23/03/2008)

    My first attempt in writing a poem in Chinese.... Hope it's not too bad. x: Took me about an hour to write that. I wish I could make more rhymes... but I lack in Mandarin pinyin and writing character knowledges. I would know the Cantonese word, but no clue how it's written. >_<; Anyways, constructive criticisms are more than welcomed!
     
    #1 neko-pochi, Mar 25, 2008
    Last edited: Mar 27, 2008
  2. bbes

    bbes Incredible

    pity i can't read chinese very well, but im sure its pretty gd.
     
  3. neko-pochi

    neko-pochi Well-Known Member

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    ^ Well thanks, I guess XD
     
  4. sigh i can't read either so i put it through a translator and it although it was a rough translation it sounds pretty good and hell I wish i could read/write chinese lol

    all i could read was the title LOL