Illusion

Discussion in 'Fan Fix' started by WhiteBlaster, Feb 21, 2007.

  1. WhiteBlaster

    WhiteBlaster Active Member

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    Eyes closed tight
    In dim light
    A being lay on a sheet
    Made out of beet

    Quietly as the soundless night
    I do see a body rise to its height
    Moving up in pace
    Destinate to a place

    Wherever it will exceed
    It tricked what my eyes can see
    Can it be true?
    To know what is truce.

    No! impossible
    No one is possible
    To lift in mid air
    Like a hanging pear

    Surprised I am
    Running like a lamb
    Made my confession
    It's just an illusion.
     
  2. AbZoNyX

    AbZoNyX Well-Known Member

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    Well, this is pretty neat. Just something about it that doesn't flow though, otherwise good job.
     
  3. preciouslost

    preciouslost Member

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    wow, what were you thinking when u were writing it?
     
  4. Peanut

    Peanut Member

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    haha...very funny
     
  5. AbZoNyX

    AbZoNyX Well-Known Member

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    Lol gravedigger.