Can u give me some comments on my essay of what's good and what I need to change. http://www.megaupload.com/?d=C4LLJGBK
are there any specific requirements given? otherwise i think its not bad, u got the ideas flows well, each issues are introduced in a pretty good order. i was thinkin some of the dialogue is lil bit too long, idk thats my opinion.
I wouldn't call it a essay, more a short story (just a point). The beginning and end work good, but the parts with the conversations "sounds" a bit weird/unnatural, where the co-workers talks more like a "professor" trying to teach you what the consequences of climate/planet-lab are.
Even though this is 2 weeks ago and you probably handed in -_- But you need to be more specific what type of essay it might be... Whether it's a research essay or argument essay, etc, each type has their own format
